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Order, 11/7 or 7/11??
by Lilly (sierpinski)
at November 8th, 2006 (09:04 pm)

1. The Question by Philip Bergman
(Serious monologue-type thing)

2. Let's See How Many People I Can Make Fun Of In Five Minutes Or Less by Sophie Taft
(The answer: six.)

3. Some Haikus by LILLY
(nickels suck I guess)

4. Play With Fire by Lily Chong
(A scene about maybe honest relationships)

5. The Ghost Of Business Past by Seven Fingers McGee
(A dancing Business ghost)

6. Be Smart by John Kenyon
(Monologue from a society gone wrong)

7. Comedy Routine by Bergip Philman
(Apparently, jokes aren't really that funny.)

8. Sammy the Snake by King Sophie
(Song about lonliness, friendship, outer space, and reptiles)

9. Patterns of Mass by Margo Klemme
(Abstract poem)

10. Personal Essay #1 by LILLY
(lack of new pieces/Mrs. Fetweis thinks I'm weird=sex explosion)

11. The Consolation of Art by Janani
(Breakup becomes a game of metaphors)

12. Mike Sings by Mike
(Mike sings)


Um, yeah good job guys. You're like my heroes.

It's really cool when people write pieces because we find out how talented everyone is. Even if writing pieces means having Faith dance around on stage dressed like a ghost, because that was even my favorite one. Srsly.

Sorry this was posted a little late--review it?

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Posted by: I'm just a silly little bumble-bee! (hello_dalai)
Posted at: November 9th, 2006 03:18 am (UTC)
Tanya Cropped

Ooops, totally slipped my mind. Thanks guys for reminding me. . .I even had a piece. . .ok, not really, but I could have!

Posted by: Lilly (sierpinski)
Posted at: November 9th, 2006 03:22 am (UTC)

It was in the announcements!

Yeah we were all wondering where you were actually. We were like "We can't start the show without Osean! He'll probably show up with a great piece wherein he wears a funny hat and cries!!!!"

Jk jk; we like your pieces.

Posted by: agua_goat (agua_goat)
Posted at: November 9th, 2006 04:10 am (UTC)

1. The Question by Philip Bergman
-wasn't actually expecting seriousness. it's sort of like if I did serious stuff, it would maybe be wierd. Not too bad methinks?

2. Let's See How Many People I Can Make Fun Of In Five Minutes Or Less by Sophie Taft
-oh snap, I got made fun of. I liked it.

3. Some Haikus by LILLY
-ha I loved the start, but don't actually remember the end.

4. Play With Fire by Lily Chong
-was it supposed to have lynday lohan and hillary duff. is that something that I was too old to catch on to?

5. The Ghost Of Business Past by Seven Fingers McGee
-dang it seven fingers McGee! way to pretty much be awesome, then scare us like friggen ghosts. You got like one inch away from that ledge like the first time, and then went back, so I half thought you were joking.... less give some credit to phillipe and the sull-train for the catch....

6. Be Smart by John Kenyon
-what grade is that guy in? also is that how he really talks? He should write more. anyways, I don't remember the piece, meaning it was a little boring to me. But write more, but write more interesting, or spice it up?

7. Comedy Routine by Bergip Philman
-oh man, that's the stuff me gusta

8. Sammy the Snake by King Sophie
-ha, about the best song I've ever heard

9. Patterns of Mass by Margo Klemme
I love a new writer in margo, and also I guess faith and kenyon guy. sweet poem. I blinked away from like 2 lines, and cracked my fingers while not knowing, which made eleni hit me. But cool, and awesome to see her write/come?

10. Personal Essay #1 by LILLY
lilly, did you really have an english class connection to that? also.... loved it

11. The Consolation of Art by Janani
those were no shamers? um, liked it, but got sort of lost in the middle of it having the whole situation, but also, I thought it was funny.

12. Mike Sings by Mike
made that on the way to pick eleni up. I don't actually like hamburgers and potats that much anyways... oh and F.Y.I. hamburguesas= hamburgers.

ok, so good job peoples. now if we could get double that everything. seriously, let's pack it so tight that people sit on the floor. also, well idk. pretty much keep it up.

Posted by: regina_g_fan (regina_g_fan)
Posted at: November 11th, 2006 01:08 am (UTC)
Tasha's purple eye

Just fyi, Mike, John Kenyon is a senior this year and yes, he really talks like that.

Posted by: agua_goat (agua_goat)
Posted at: November 11th, 2006 06:40 am (UTC)

nice

Posted by: regina_g_fan (regina_g_fan)
Posted at: November 9th, 2006 02:21 pm (UTC)
Ashlee/drama queen

1. The Question by Philip Bergman
Oh man. Philip is AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!

2. Let's See How Many People I Can Make Fun Of In Five Minutes Or Less by Sophie Taft
Funny funny funny. I was made fun of too........I thought it was funny.

3. Some Haikus by LILLY
Nickels really do suck.

4. Play With Fire by Lily Chong
Not my best. But John did a great job.

5. The Ghost Of Business Past by Seven Fingers McGee
ADORABLE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That's got my vote for BOYS.

6. Be Smart by John Kenyon
I didn't really understand it.........but John admitted beforehand that he should have explained it was from this book he's writing.

7. Comedy Routine by Bergip Philman
Oh Phil. My best friend in school doing standup. Yay!!!!!!!!!!!!!

8. Sammy the Snake by King Sophie
Cutecutecutecute!!!!!!!!!!!

9. Patterns of Mass by Margo Klemme
Margo should really write more stuff.

10. Personal Essay #1 by LILLY
Sex Explosion...........ha ha.

11. The Consolation of Art by Janani
I liked it! I didn't really understand it at first, but then someone (I think Margo) explained it to me.

12. Mike Sings by Mike
It'd be funnier if I understood what he was saying, I DON'T SPEAK SPANISH!!!!!!!!!

Posted by: Merit (spoonsharpwit)
Posted at: November 9th, 2006 07:16 pm (UTC)

Haha.

This is all I have to say.

5. I am amazing. I should always write pieces. Also, Faith is the bomb diggity of all dancers.

8. I loved this song but the last verse detracted... It was real' cute anyways.

10. Oh man, a personal essay about Sex Explosion is pretty much the greatest idea ever. This might have even been as funny as when it was invented.

12. Mike, I love you. If you are not already married, uhhhhh. You can marry me.

Posted by: agua_goat (agua_goat)
Posted at: November 9th, 2006 11:45 pm (UTC)

ha well I am a classical mormon as ya know, so I can marry many person. so yes missy

Posted by: Lilly (sierpinski)
Posted at: November 11th, 2006 01:13 am (UTC)

Man, nothing could ever be as funny as when it was invented.

Posted by: King Sophie I (sophieistheking)
Posted at: November 10th, 2006 03:55 am (UTC)

Posted by: Lilly (sierpinski)
Posted at: November 11th, 2006 01:11 am (UTC)

1. The Question by Philip Bergman
Okay so I am not that big of a fan serious pieces in general (because they are super hard to write so they usually end up like this: "I am I middle-aged gay guy and I got beaten up and killed maybe?" and that is NOT COOL) but this was pretty good and I could relate to it. Oh yeah I think another problem with serious pieces is that it's really hard to end them without being cheesy and predictable because when you're not just trying to get laughs, you're under pressure to say something meaningful in closing and... that's probably why that was the weakest part.

2. Let's See How Many People I Can Make Fun Of In Five Minutes Or Less by Sophie Taft
I was crappy in this but Sophie did a really good job. Even though inside jokes like that are probably not very funny to newcomers/outsiders, it was cool how the regulars could recognize each person's style without it being announced (which in retrospect would have totally ruined it why did I ever think you were going to do that I am so dumb)

3. Some Haikus by LILLY
Not one of my best!

4. Play With Fire by Lily Chong
Well, the first like was something close to "I am so bored. No girls are attracting to me." That was basically pure gold. If your write more things like that one line you could have a comedy piece. If you write things where two guys are fighting over you, you are basically trying to live out a fantasy on stage? Which is cool for you I guess but not as much for the audience. Anyway, this piece had promise, and I recommend trying to build on that.

5. The Ghost Of Business Past by Seven Fingers McGee
Yeah, I wanted to dash onstage and grab away the chairs so she didn't hurt herself, but... it would have ruined the whole thing, and the whole thing was just too good to mess up. Anyway. Besides the fact that if your vision is going to be impaired you should probably make sure your space is clear of danger first, this was perfect.

6. Be Smart by John Kenyon
This was interesting; I liked how the listener had to put the pieces together to figure out exactly what was happening; who the speaker was, what he was saying, and what he was really saying... Although it could have been more dynamic. On the one hand I like it when people step outside the box at Yes Shame and perform things that aren't like everything else, but at the same time, I want to be entertained. Anyway though. This was good.

7. Comedy Routine by Bergip Philman
This could have done with some more planning, but man, who else can just go up onstage and rattle off a comedy routine, and do it as well as Philip. (Apparently not Sophie and I... Halloween jokes anyone?) Yeah, Phil=good at stuff.

8. Sammy the Snake by King Sophie
I liked it. I don't know what you thought was wrong with this; it was way cute.

9. Patterns of Mass by Margo Klemme
I wasn't paying the closest of attentions, but this seemed really cool anyway.

10. Personal Essay #1 by LILLY
Yep

11. The Consolation of Art by Janani
I enjoyed this; I thought Katy Baggs did a good job and also the X's for the Yes-censored bits were a nice touch. I felt bad because I didn't kow Janani's name!!

12. Mike Sings by Mike
A++
See this is the kind of weird stuff you mostly only see at Shame theatres, and it is the only stuff we really want to see anyway.

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